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Hey {{first_name|bro}},
Doing yet another one of my famous copy reviews today.
And just to clear things up, this color is my review. everything else is copy.
let’s get into it…
Promotional Email copy
Subject: %Firstname% She won't see you till you do this…
PV: Fix it NOW
Instead of saying “see” I would say “notice” and I’d also make your PV build on your SL
It already kinda does but I would take an aspect of whatever it is you’re revealing in your email and put that in the PV while also building on the SL
Hey %Firstname%,
Picture this:
You are at an event and then you spot her.
Your heart races but this time it's excitement, not panic.
You walk over with confidence. Start a natural conversation. She's laughing.
You exchange numbers.
Then, later that week, you're on a date.
What does this have to do with the SL? You’re not talking about the thing you mentioned in the SL
That's what my student Mike experienced after joining my Approach Anxiety Breakthrough Masterclass.
See what he and other students are saying:
[VIDEO - "Tristan Changed My Dating Life"]
[PHOTO]
Bro why are you putting all this before whatever you where gonna teach in the SL?
"Because of what you taught me, I built the confidence to walk up to beautiful girls."
These aren't special dudes.
They were just like you.
Stuck in the cycle of not being confident enough to approach her, talk to her or even go on a date
Sound familiar?
Yeah you just said they were just like them
You can change that today.
Here's what you get from the masterclass:
✅ The exact framework to approach without fear
✅ Word-for-word conversation starters that actually work
✅ A personal accountability system to keep you moving
✅ Text message templates for after you get her number and MUCH MORE…
These are just features bro, talk about the benefits they get from these things
No pickup artist BS.
I'm helping you build real confidence that actually sticks.
Fix your formatting bro, write real sentences that are real sentence length
This masterclass was originally valued at $497.
But it goes for only $27 if you take action today.
Plus I give you a 30-Day Money Back Guarantee. If it doesn't work, you get every penny back. Zero risk.
Join the masterclass now and start today
If this is going to a sales page I wouldn’t mention the price or even the course in the email and just build intrigue around sales page
What's it going to be, %Firstname%?
Another year of "what ifs" and late-night regrets? Or the confidence to finally get the girl?
Your move.
Eh this kinda just sounds like AI slop
Tristan
P.S. Most guys see real results within the first few days. But this price will not remain at $27 as more people enrol.
So don't wait. See you inside
FINAL NOTES: bro you didn’t even mention anything about what was in your SL so this email would probably fail.
As for the email itself?
It’s alright. Just average bro it looks, smells, and reads exactly like all of the other emails in the dating niche.
I would focus more on being original and try to use AI alot less
—John
S: 179
T: Leave ur copy for review